Chicho's comment on the 3rd person perspective raises a interesting point.
Its almost as if it was a "wish list" written by your BS. While I can understand that your BS may want to see changes in your actions/behaviors and may have written them down, this list appears to be externally motivated. Are you in full agreement that these are things that you need to change or are you just agreeing to your BS's wishes?
I think that it would work much better if it was internally driven. I don't have an issue with your BS or IC helping you clearly identify your shortcomings but they can't be the driver behind the chance.
True effective change comes when we want it. I would feel more comfortable if this list read, I will not get defensive, I will be empathetic etc.
Do you see the difference? The "we" statement comes across as you doing things because others want you to. The "I" statement comes across as taking ownership and taking charge of your own healing.